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THE FINAL PAGE OF THIS NIGHTMARISHLY BAD COMIC THANK GOD

Many moons after I started poking fun at wolf comics and sparkledogs and dog comics and sparklewolves and dogsparklves, I still get questions about what does and does not constitute a "good story." So to that end, I figured to make a
sparkledog comic of my own as an example. The thing is, this is NOT an example of a good story. This is an example of what NOT to do. This comic is horrible.

Flaws you'll notice in this comic include:

- Horrible art and layouts
- Boring, confusing story
- No meaningful introduction to the world or its rules
- Repetitive character designs
- Unlikable characters
- Terrible dialogue
- Inconsistency in pretty much all regards
- Constant threats of lawsuits (which in my case are fake, but you know people do this in real life)

Yes, the characters are aware that they're in a bad story, but don't take that to mean "if you acknowledge your comic's bad, then it's ok!" Making a terrible comic and then constantly posting "lol this sucks" while making no effort to fix its problems has been played out, so don't do it.

When reading this, think about how confusing and bland it is, and think to yourself "if I was writing this, what would I do to make it GOOD?" Use this to stretch your writing muscles. Then, make your own story with your own (much better) characters in your own (much more interesting) world, and apply what you've learned! Don't let your precious creations turn into these awful jerks!
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~CrazyKirlia Jul 7, 2011
You emulated the feel of a terrible online fanfiction/fancomic very well (as in by the time I finished reading this, I felt distinctly sick and tired), although the art was very beautiful, actually. None of the characters were likable at all, and are people really that paranoid about palette-swapped characters? Geez...I remember making a palette-swapped Sonic character when I was ten because the forum I lurked around then was dominated by them. Glad I never actually used her...

...BECAUSE AN INSANE KIRLIA IS THAT MUCH BETTER OH YEAH /sarcasm.

Your art is so awesome. Keep up the epic work.
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*TheLupineOne Jun 28, 2011  Student General Artist
THIS WAS SOOOOOO AWESOME
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I don't want the adventure to end, I want to be ENLIGHTENED!
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~BlackIce64 Jun 28, 2011
This is actually a very entertaining comic, especially because it mocks other comics for being terrible and not fixing anything. Your art style is perfect for a comic.
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~Altermentality Jun 27, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, wait, this is the end. I was wondering how long it would go on. =P But I had a good time. Kind of like I actually enjoy having nightmares, because then when it's over I feel relieved that my life isn't actually that horrible.
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~sciguy007 Jun 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Strangely enough it was entertaining because it was so bad.
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~Altermentality Jun 27, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Says one of one things!" You are brilliant =P
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